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My actions are silent,        
Like words to the deaf.
Against the trends
Thought before action
the unbroken motion
passes through unnoticed.

My feelings, I conceal,
Like a ninja in the dark.
My thoughts are mine,
Your impressions, yours.
Fear arises, thinking of
where they may meet.

My eyes spot my shot,       
Like a patient hunter.
A simple suggestion,
a shot at the stars,
an ambition soars,
leaving regret behind.

My thoughts at ease,
Like someone about to die.
Thoughts and impressions,
ours greet each other,
on the same playing field,
and in the same direction.

My every fiber somber
Like America on 9/11
An unknowing grasp,
a false pretense,
a sad revelation,
of opposite desires.

My heart will remember
Like The Forgotten
The simple time in life,
the smiles, the flirting,
the laughter, the love,
carefree in your company.

My little world trembles
Like an earthquake
Passing the ancient way
of thought and remembrance
Bringing a gloomy future
of neglectful carelessness
©2005-2009 ~iondemuerto
:iconiondemuerto:

Author's Comments

Rawr.... yes believe it or not... FINALLY A NEW PIECE!!!! ;)

Ok so I embedded a message in this one, it has to do with the analogies... If you look at it closely you will find the following.. "Silent words, I conceal in the dark. My shot patient, at ease, about to die. Every fiber like my heart, Forgotten. My world trembles."

Ya I tried to BOLD them before I copied it over maybe it will turn out right... but probly not.. I don't have that kind of luck and if I do, I don't have enuf to spare... :)

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The embedded message is a bit dark. Or at least the way I am reading it, but perhaps I am reading it wrong. I like how you used it though, that you started with it and wove it through your new poem, very cool. Nice and long for only taking you two days! It is another sad one,...but I guess you knew that already! :D
I really like the discriptions you used, such as the ninja and the hunter and pulling in the emotion from Septeber 11th.

Nice job.

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